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12:27:37 <IAmTheMovement> Got3n: i like it alot, but here is soome crit, the dark thick edges do not suit the gradience very much but it not so bad
12:27:43 <IAmTheMovement> barely noticed it

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Sorry, I had to run, but thank you for the crit! I'll work on that in my next render! Many thanks!

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ooo thats pretty funky, likes it alot

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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoy it ^^

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You said you didn't mind real critique, I'm hoping you stick to it!

First off, let me start by saying I like the render. It's got a nice flow, and the stripes and colors are nice - suggesting some form of human anatomy even. Perhaps you could've expanded on that with textures.. But that's something else.

I think where this piece is really hit and miss, is in the postwork. The electric 'sparkles' are plentiful.. And that's it. There's no real motion coming from them, and they're, well, fairly present. Read: You can't ignore them. If they were more spread out, detailed, or even affected the piece (reflections, highlights, etcetra) they'd have worked a lot better.

The background is also not up to the render's standard, in ym eyes. The low contrast gives it a very 'flat' feel, and it's texture detracts from the main element of the piece - the render. Next to that.. the 'dynamic' text kind of breaks the lines - its angle is off by something like 3-4 degrees.


All in all, this piece has a lot of potential. If you ever re-do this, or want advice for your next piece, I'd suggest you try and work to emphasise the render, rather than just add 'special' elements. Usually, this leads to more unique scenes. I think you've got it in you to make some lovely art, and hope to see some more!

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Hmm. I'd get rid of the "shadow" the render casts because it makes the background feel a bit flat.

Thank a ton! Really enjoyed this and really helpful!

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